Peer Review 8

Hey Brandon, you’ve written a very intense entry this week! The stream of consciousness style definitely suits the topic and works well to draw out an emotional response from the reader – I know I felt a wide range of emotions reading this. It definitely makes me curious as to whether you wrote this off the top of your head or whether it was from a personal experience. I did notice a few typos – mostly missing letters and punctuation – so it may be a good idea to just reread over this again just to fix these up. I really enjoyed this entry, good work! 🙂


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